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the tables below give information about sales of fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countriesThe image presents two tables showing 'Sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas (1998 & 2004)'. Table for coffee: UK (1998 - 1.3, 2004 - 8), Switzerland (1998 - 3, 2004 - 6), Denmark (1998 - 1.8, 2004 - 2), Belgium (1998 - 1.5, 2004 - 7), Sweden (1998 - 1.0, 2004 - 3). Table for bananas: UK (1998 - 1.9, 2004 - 45), Switzerland (1998 - 5.8, 2004 - 6), Denmark (1998 - 1.7, 2004 - 4), Belgium (1998 - 1.0, 2004 - 5.5), Sweden (1998 - 0.6, 2004 - 6), expressed in millions of euros.

the tables below give information about sales of fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas in 1999 and 2004 in five European countriesThe image presents two tables showing 'Sales of Fairtrade-labelled coffee and bananas (1998 & 2004)'. Table for coffee: UK (1998 - 1.3, 2004 - 8), Switzerland (1998 - 3, 2004 - 6), Denmark (1998 - 1.8, 2004 - 2), Belgium (1998 - 1.5, 2004 - 7), Sweden (1998 - 1.0, 2004 - 3). Table for bananas: UK (1998 - 1.9, 2004 - 45), Switzerland (1998 - 5.8, 2004 - 6), Denmark (1998 - 1.7, 2004 - 4), Belgium (1998 - 1.0, 2004 - 5.5), Sweden (1998 - 0.6, 2004 - 6), expressed in millions of euros.
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