The line chart below displays the crime rates in four different countries (USA, UK, Australia, and South Africa) from 1985 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line chart below displays the crime rates in four different countries (USA, UK, Australia, and South Africa) from 1985 to 2020. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
This
line graph provides
a key information
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about the crime
level
in the USA, UK, Australia, and South Africa btween1985 to 2020.
Overall
, it is clear from the graph that the
cities
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city's
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homicide and sexual
violance
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violence
levels are the lowest, in the other hand the serious
assaults
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assaults'
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livle
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levels
were higher than decreased in the
last
years.
according to
what showed, in cities homicide in all years begin 2003 the rates less than 25, but in 2008 the
level
grew a little thin back normaly, if we look at sexual violence it is so close to
cities
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homicide that it was less than 50, but in 2015 the
level
started to increase to
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50 in 2017. In terms of serious assaults between 2003 to 2005, the
level
was to much high that it was more than 200, after that the
level
does not change for 3 years , in 2008 the rate decreased
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a normal way in 2012 the
level
dawn so fast to be less than 150 and be so close to the robbery
level
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