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Writing Samples
Band 3.5

The images illustrate the layout of the town called Lakeside from 2000 to 2009.

The maps provide information about the changes which took place
of
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in
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town
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the town
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 lakeside
ove
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over
 the period
nine
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of nine
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 years from 2000 to 2009. From an
overll
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overall
 perspective, the region
experinced
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experienced
 considerable changes during the period . The most substantial
differences
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difference
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 between
2
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the 2
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maps
,
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is, expansion
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expansion
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the expansion
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 of
industrial
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the industrial
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 complex
than
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to
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 other buildings. In detail,
residentql
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the residentql
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 area which
located
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is located
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 at the bottom corner
in
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of
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 the
firts
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first
 map
over
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of
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this
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 building was situated industrial complex which developed and expanded in 2009.
Furthermore
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,
lake
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a lake
the lake
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 which
located
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is located
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esat
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east
 side of the map was demolished and shrunk to
new
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the new
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 pond
at the end
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 of the period. So lakeside 's art centre was
in
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on
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south-western
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the south-western
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 side knocked down to make way for
cinema
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the cinema
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 centre. In 2000 an old town and
derelic
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derelict
derelicts
 warehouse were situated by
th
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the
 lake
futprther
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further
farther
 north, which was destroyed to build
way
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a way
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 to
car
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the car
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 park , office and university place in 2009. Turning to the next buildings
whuch
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which
 remain unchanged between 2000 and 2009.
Residental
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The residential
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 area in the
north-west
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northwest
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 corner of
lakeside
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the lakeside
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remain
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remained
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stayed
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apply
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until 2009.
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, school constriction was located south-east side on both maps
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and remain
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remain
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remained
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 unchanged
at the end
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 of the year. So , all places
was
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were
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 constructed
to
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into
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 new
one
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ones
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. But school and
residental
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residential
 area stayed in both years.

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coherence cohesion
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coherence cohesion
Revisit your introduction to ensure it clearly outlines the key points you will discuss, and provides a good structure to follow.
task achievement
To enhance task achievement, include more specific examples that effectively illustrate the changes and developments throughout the years.
task achievement
The essay demonstrates an understanding of the task by describing changes to the town of Lakeside over the given period.
task achievement
Use of maps as a comparison tool is evident, which aligns well with the requirements of the task.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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