The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart depicts data on the places used for several types of
dance
classes,
while
the bar chart illustrates the types of dances that are popular among
students
of different age groups in a local town in Australia.
Overall
, almost half of the
students
use private
studios
as their practice venue, and college-based
studios
are the lowest in number in terms of usage.
Also
,
students
in the late-adolescent group prefer ballet the most,
while
modern
dance
is more popular among the late-adolescent group.
Firstly
, 48% of
students
in that particular town in Australia use private
studios
for their practice sessions. Meanwhile, school halls are the practice place for 24%, and community halls and other facilities are used by 18% of
students
.
Nevertheless
, college-based
studios
are the least popular places, with only 10% usage.
However
, ballet is more popular among children, with 600
students
,
while
more than 500
students
proves
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prove
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that teenagers are interested in modern
dance
more than others.
Nevertheless
, almost 450 children are interested in tap
dance
, and the number
for
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of
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teenagers in the same category is around 400.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "nevertheless, while".
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, students, studios with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • attending
  • currently
  • location
  • variety
  • ballet
  • hip-hop
  • contemporary
  • jazz
  • venues
  • popularity
  • attendees
  • juxtaposing
  • correlating
  • proximity
  • cultural influences
  • trends
  • anomalies
  • monopoly
  • proportion
  • distribution
  • enrollment
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