The charts below give information on the location and types of dance classes young people in a town in Australia are currently attending. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie chart depicts data on the places used for several types of
dance
classes, Use synonyms
while
the bar chart illustrates the types of dances that are popular among Linking Words
students
of different age groups in a local town in Australia.
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Overall
, almost half of the Linking Words
students
use private Use synonyms
studios
as their practice venue, and college-based Use synonyms
studios
are the lowest in number in terms of usage. Use synonyms
Also
, Linking Words
students
in the late-adolescent group prefer ballet the most, Use synonyms
while
modern Linking Words
dance
is more popular among the late-adolescent group.
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Firstly
, 48% of Linking Words
students
in that particular town in Australia use private Use synonyms
studios
for their practice sessions. Meanwhile, school halls are the practice place for 24%, and community halls and other facilities are used by 18% of Use synonyms
students
. Use synonyms
Nevertheless
, college-based Linking Words
studios
are the least popular places, with only 10% usage.
Use synonyms
However
, ballet is more popular among children, with 600 Linking Words
students
, Use synonyms
while
more than 500 Linking Words
students
Use synonyms
proves
that teenagers are interested in modern Change the verb form
prove
dance
more than others. Use synonyms
Nevertheless
, almost 450 children are interested in tap Linking Words
dance
, and the number Use synonyms
for
teenagers in the same category is around 400.Change preposition
of
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "nevertheless, while".
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words dance, students, studios with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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