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The maps below show ап industrial area in the town of Norblton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information Ьу selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant

The maps below show ап industrial area in the town of Norblton, and planned future development of the site. Summarise the information Ьу selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where re/evant
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The
digram
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diagram
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 depicts
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a comparsion
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comparsion
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comparison
 between an area of factories called Norbiton today and the prediction of the same place in the future supported
with
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 new developments.
Over all
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,as the
map
repreasent
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represents
, there are several changes throughout the period . All the factories will
demolish
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, and they will
replace
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 by new housing . A new school
expected
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 to be seen in the future and it will
locates
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 on the east of the
map
 .
Additionally
 , beside the school , there are new buildings which are Playground, Medical centre and Shops . The playground will be directly in the south of the river . With regards to the Medical centre , it will
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 on the south of the
map
.
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 shops, it predicted to be found
on
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in
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 the middle of the
map
 . A long house will
be build
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 on the north of the
map
. In the centre of the river , a huge wall will
seprate
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separate
 the river north
the
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map
. In the
centere
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centre
 of the
digram
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diagram
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, there’s a circular which is expected to
has
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have
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 a linked bath with one of the houses . North
the
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 large circular , there’s a small circular
will
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that will
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 be constructed in the future.
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Contractions: Don't use contractions.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words map with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 6 times.
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