The two given charts explain the employment rate of Korean people from 1980 to 2000 according to the educational background and what types of jobs they got in the same years.
There are two
bar
charts that display information about job
patterns in Korea.The first bar
chart illustrates the percentage
of Korean people
employed in the years 1980,1990 and 2000 consisting of three bar
charts each year divided by educational degrees.Another bar
chart presents the proportion of four kinds of careers people
had categorized by educational level.
Overall
,it can be seen that the overall
percentage
of the employment rate decreased within the periods given and a regular job
became the most applied job
in a higher educational group
.
To begin
with,the percentage
of first-degree employment had remained at the highest rate in all years with a slight decrease from just under 100% to around 90%.Also
,the primary-school graduated group
had a similar trend but with a dramatic drop which was from 80% of people
to only half of them.While
the percentage
of Korean people
with a high school degree gradually rose from 85% to 90%.
Moving on to the other bar
chart,Clearly,the more degrees Korean people
had,the more chance they enrolled for a regular job
,which was 70% in the first-degree group
whereas
the other jobs people
had in this
group
were less than 20%.Additionally
,a similar pattern can be seen in the primary-school graduate group
in which a temporary job
had the highest percentage
of employment which was 65% and other jobs were less than 20%.On the other hand
,In the high-school graduate group
,the proportion of each career was not significantly different.That is
to say,half of the people
in this
group
had a position at a regular job
followed by a temporary job
accounting for 25%.The other two jobs were less employed occupying less than 20%.Submitted by chawanat.pla on
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bar, job, percentage, people, group with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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