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The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting amd reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the average percentages in typical meals of three types of nutrients, all of which may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarize the information by selecting amd reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie chart above provides information about the distribution of three types of ingredients used in food
such
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 as
sodium
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, saturated fat and added
sugar
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 in different meals during
day to day
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day-to-day
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 life that might have a negative
affect
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effect
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 if they
overused
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are overused
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.
Overall
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, as the chart illustrates
sodium
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 and saturated fat contribute significantly
in
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to
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 dinner
while
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,
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apply
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 nearly about half of the
sugar
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 we consume can
be find
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be found
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 in snacks.
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Moreover
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 breakfast has the least amount of all three categories which
are
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 less than 20%. The proportion of
sodium
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 and saturated fat are relatively similar in lunch which are 29% and 26% respectively
however
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, added
sugar
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 percentages in lunch
is
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are
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 slightly lower.
Although
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 half of the portion of snacks are made of added
sugar
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,the rate of
sodium
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 and saturated fat in snacks
are
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is
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 around 20%.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sodium, sugar with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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