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The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.

The graph below shows the consumption of fish and some different kinds of meat in a European country between 1979 and 2004. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features.
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The given line graph demonstrates data on
weight
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the weight
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 of 4 various types of meat eaten per person:
chicken
,
beef
, lamb and fish in European countries from 1979 to 2004.
Overall
, it can be clearly seen that
weight
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the weight
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 of
chicken
 which person ate
chicken
 meat significantly increased between 1979 and 2004, but
this
 figure in
other
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the other
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 3 categories declined
fractionaly
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fractionally
fractional
. As regards
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the quentity
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quentity
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quantity
quality
 of
chicken
 meat significantly rose from 140 to 250, but
this
 trend in
beef
 and lamb declined by 100. To be more precise,
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the quentity
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quentity
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quantity
 of
beef
 was started dominant in
1979
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the 1979
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 year and sharply increased from 170 to 240.
Conversely
,
this
 trend experienced
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a fluctuated
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fluctuated declined
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fluctuating decline
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 between 1984 and 2004 years.
In addition
, statistics
of
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for
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 lamb
was started
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apply
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remained the same as
beef
, but
this
 figure between 1984 and 1989 years, slightly increased and declined
significant
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significantly
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 in the next decades. Surprisingly, between 1999 and 2004,
this
 trend experienced
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a slightly
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slightly increased
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slight increase
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.
However
, statistics of fish remained nearly unchecked during
this
 period.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words chicken, beef with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "declined" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slightly" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • trend
  • poultry
  • beef
  • lamb
  • significant
  • fluctuate
  • peak
  • trough
  • plummet
  • soar
  • steady
  • exponential
  • dietary habits
  • health consciousness
  • food industry
  • innovation
  • cultural shift
  • economic conditions
  • demographic changes
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