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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. ab

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. ab
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The bar chart represents information about ten different nations which used and produced the highest proportion of
electricity
 in 2014.
Overall
, China stayed
at
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 the first place by consuming and manufacturing
electricity
 and there was
at the end
 of the rank Korea Republic.
Firstly
, almost all of the countries produced more than they used, only
Germany
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electricity
 usage was 582,5
billion
,
however
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this
 country’s light energy manufacturing was only 526,6
billion
 and China’s was 5,398
billion
kWh
electricity
, China’s residents and government
totally
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 used 5,322
billion
kWh
. In second place United States,
they
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consumed much
more
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less than they produced, 3,866
billion
 and 4,099
billion
. Russia, Japan and India had approximately the same amount.
Moreover
,
other
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following
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three countries
also
 had nearly
same
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 results on average
550
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of 550
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billion
kWh
, Canada, France and Brazil. Republic Korea as the tenth country manufactured 485,1
billion
 and consumed 449,5
billion
kWh
electricity
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of electricity
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in
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this
 year.
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