The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. nb
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The bar chart below gives information about
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the top
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electricity
in 2014.
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countries which compared electricity
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production was China
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Korea
Republic.
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Korean
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the top
ten
countries which compared from production and consumption of electricity
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, United
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the
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countries Korea
Republic had the lowest Correct your spelling
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proportion
about 485.1 billion kWh of production electricity
. Brazil and Germany had approximately same
value.
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the same
China
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the Korea
Korea
Republic and Brazil. Correct your spelling
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China
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a proportion
5,322
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