The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. nb

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. 

summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. nb
The bar chart below gives information about
top
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ten
counties
from
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producing and consuming
of
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electricity
in 2014.
It is clear that
,
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there were
ten
countries which compared
electricity
from producing and consuming.
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, the highest
proportion
from
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electricity
production was
China
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in China
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and the lowest was
Korea
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Republic. In there,
top
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ten
countries which compared from production and consumption of
electricity
.
China
,
United
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States and Russia had
highest
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the highest
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proportion
from
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of
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producing energy and they were one of the first.
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,
from
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this
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top
ten
countries
Korea
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Korean
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Republic had the lowest
proportion
about 485.1 billion kWh of production
electricity
. Brazil and Germany had approximately
same
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value.
China
,
United
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States and Russia had
same
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the same
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place
as
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in
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producing from consuming
electricity
. In there, lowest
proportion
of consumption was in
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the Korea
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Korea
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Korean
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Republic and Brazil.
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, Japan
in
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forth
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fourth
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place
after him India which replaced fifth
place
. In
the
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first
place
China
with
proportion
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a proportion
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5,322
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of 5,322
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billion kWh.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "furthermore".
Vocabulary: Replace the words ten, electricity, proportion, china, place with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.

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