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The table shows the change in the number of cinemas in different regions in a European country between 2004 and 2009

The table shows the change in the number of cinemas in different regions in a European country between 2004 and 2009
The table illustrates the trend in cinema openings and closures in four regions of a European nation from 2004 to 2009.
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, the total
number
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 of
cinemas
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 saw an increase. The city
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center
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 and near-city
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center
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 regions experienced new cinema openings, but the reverse was true for two other areas. The city
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center
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 was the area that had the most
number
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 of
cinemas
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 in both years, with 1512 in 2004, which
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 increased to 1620 in 2009, representing a positive
change
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 of +3.1%. Compared to
city
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the city
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center
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, near-city
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center
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 regions showed a
change
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 of +1.6% as the
number
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 of
cinemas
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 rose from 300 to 400. As for suburbs, it was the area with the least
number
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 of
cinemas
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, and its figure saw a dramatic
change
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 of -25%, decreasing from 40 to 30 in quantity. A similar downward trend can be observed in Countrysides.
Initially
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, in 2004, the
number
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 of
cinemas
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 was 108, but five years later,
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 region saw 18 closures, with a changing rate of -6%. Luckily, the total
number
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 demonstrated an upward
change
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 of +2%, with 187 new openings throughout the period.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, cinemas, center, change with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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