The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
The pie charts illustrate the proportion of
water
consumption for
variety
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of occasions
in
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6 different
continent
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.
Overall
,
water
mostly
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is mostly
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used
in
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agricultural purposes in every continent,
whereas
the lowest
use
of
water
found
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in
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domestic
reason
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.
water
consumption in
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North America and
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Europe, both
continent
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used
water
for their industrial
use
about 48-53%,
also
39-32% used for agricultural
use
and
rest
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of the (13% - 15% respectively used for domestic
use
).
While
, South America used 71% of the
water
for their agricultural
use
, 19% for domestic
use
and
finally
, 10% being used for industries.
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,
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Africa, Central
Asia
and
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South East
Asia
used their highest amount of
water
on
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agricultural
use
around (84%, 88% and 81% sequentially).
Moreover
, in
Africa
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Africa,
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9% of the
water
being
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used for
domestic
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a domestic
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reason
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and both Central
Asia
and
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South East
Asia
used
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the same amount of
water
for it about 7%.
Additionally
, 7-12%
water
used
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for industrial
use
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, use, asia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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