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The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percentage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The pie graphs illustrate the proportion of
water
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 used for 6 distinct places over the world North
America
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, South
America
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, Europe, Africa, Central
Asia
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 and Southeast
Asia
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.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the aggregate of agricultural use in all areas is the prime except for North
America
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 and Europe,
whereas
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, the usage of
water
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 on domestic is the least for all.
According to
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 the data presented on the chart, North
America
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 has a high outlay of
water
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 for industrial (48%),
while
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, domestic use has just 17%.
Additionally
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, in South
America
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, agriculture has the highest percentage of 71%,
however
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, industrial has only 10%.
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, the proportion of
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 on domestic in Europe is nowhere near as astronomical as industrial, with 53% compared to 15% respectively.
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, Africa uses most of their
water
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 for agriculture (84%),
on the other hand
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, industrial has the lowest percentage (7%).
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, Central
Asia
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 has the most usage of
water
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 in plants (88%). what is more, the spending of
water
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 in Southeast
Asia
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 on industrial is not as formidable as on agriculture, with 12% against 81% in order.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words water, america, asia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • consumption
  • irrigation
  • domestic
  • industrial
  • regional disparity
  • economic structure
  • sustainable management
  • water-scarce
  • population density
  • urbanization
  • data trends
  • resource allocation
  • percentage distribution
  • extremes
  • variations
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