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Band 5

“Nowadays many people complain that they have difficulties getting enough sleep.” What problems can lack of sleep cause? What can be done about lack of sleep? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In recent years, there has been a significant debate over difficulties
about
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 getting enough sleep.
However
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,
this
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 phenomenon stems from
variety
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a variety
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 of
undrlying
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underlying
 factors, ranging from lifestyle to
sitution
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situation
 and well-being but there are feasible solutions that can be implemented
to
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 adverse effects of difficulties of sleeping and there
solutions
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 for
improve
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 the
duration
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 of sleeping. To commence with, one of the problems of lack of sleep hinges on the perception
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is
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 enormous stress. stress can have an adverse effect on mental health and well-being.
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, well-being plays a vital role in business
life
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 and personal
life
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.
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,
researches
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 in Denmark shows us
stress
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that stress
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 is
effective
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an effective
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 factor in
hearts
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 attacks. Another enormous of bad
sleeping
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sleep
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 is the people who have
this
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 problem living a
dissatisfaction
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life
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.
Dissatisgaction
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Dissatisfaction
life
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laying
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a
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the
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 groundwork for depression and
acting
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acts
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 as a
catalys
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catalyst
 for
weak
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a weak
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 personality and
creating
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creates
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 obstacles in motivation.
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 is very negative
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in
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particular
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 for young people. Addressing these issues requires a
multifacted
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multifaceted
 approach.
Firsly
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Firstly
the
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apply
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people that have problems
about
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with
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 sleeping should avoid
from
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apply
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social
medias
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media
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 and bad news. Meditation
conributs
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contributes
contribute
 significantly to
have
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having
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 a good
duration
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 and quality of
sleeping
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sleep
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.
In addition
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, giving
advises
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advice
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 from
ab
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an
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 expert consultant is very important and effective.
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, there are medical doctors that
thay
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they
 are
specialist
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specialists
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 in pain
akd
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and
 sleep. In conclusion,
while
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 lifestyle and
sitution
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situation
has
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have
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 sparked considerable concern about sleeping, we can implement
wider
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a wider
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 range of effective solutions to mitigate the adverse effect of
short
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the short
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duration
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 of sleeping and
giving
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give
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 rise to improve
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duration
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the duration
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 of sleeping.

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coherence cohesion
The introduction sets a solid base for the discussion and the conclusion wraps it up by summarizing the main points.
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The essay makes good attempts at providing possible solutions, showing critical thinking.
coherence cohesion
The structure is mostly logical with an introduction, body, and conclusion clearly delineated.

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