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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

#people #university #students #study #subjects #future #science #technology
With changing times, there have been changes in popular
subjects
 to study. It is quite imperative that in any given time students would want to choose to learn skills that would allow them to have a successful future. Going with the theme,
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 exactly how one would pick their career as well. Needless to
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this
 strategy has worked for many.
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, when it comes to studies, one shoe fits all is not the notion that always works. People who are of the opinion that students must pick
subjects
 as per their liking
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 that each
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 has
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 own
strength
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. New advancement in the field happens when the scholars studying the topic understand it in and out. If the idea is just to pass an exam, that can be done with just a night of studying. In the USA, even medical students are allowed to complete their graduation in any of the
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 be it arts or science. Once a student has gone through four years of studying, it is probable that they will be better prepared for the next phase of studies.  Science and
technology related
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subjects
 are important but to say that only these
subjects
 must be allowed is illogical.
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General
Try to develop each point more fully with relevant examples to illustrate the argument. For instance, more concrete examples of successful individuals who studied non-science subjects could strengthen your point.
Coherence and Cohesion
Although you logically structured the essay, make sure each paragraph clearly connects to the main topic and flows naturally into the next. Use more linking words and phrases to guide readers through your argument.
Coherence and Cohesion
Enhance your introduction and conclusion to more clearly define your stance and summarize the discussion. This will help emphasize your viewpoint effectively.
Task Achievement
The essay addresses both views of the argument, showing an understanding of the complexity of the issue.
Coherence and Cohesion
The argument is logically structured into paragraphs, each covering a different aspect of the debate.
General
The language used is clear and sufficiently varied to convey meaning effectively, contributing to overall readability.

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  • foster
  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
  • aptitudes
  • wasting talent
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