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Some people prefer to spend most of their time with friends. Other people prefer to be alone most of the time. Which way of life do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support your

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It is
favored
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 by many that spend more time with
friends
,
while
 others like to stay alone. In my opinion, it is better to spend our time with our buddies. In
this
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 my answer.
Firstly
, meeting
friends
 can improve
person's
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 mood. It mitigates their stresses, which may induced
due to
 a busy lifestyle. Stress decompression could be by talking
at the end
 of the day or doing activities together because it’s crucial for us to release
a
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negative feelings.
Additionally
, gathering with
friends
 may contribute to personal productivity. It allows
to
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one to
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 share a creative idea and
made
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 an informative discussion to discuss plans.
For example
, some people’s experiences revealed that sharing
the
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daily stories or thoughts with buddies could enhance mental health and psychological status.
Secondly
, enjoying time with
friends
 more than staying alone, because
the
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 chance to visit
same
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 place,
although
 life without gathering is boring. So it is essential to have at least one friend.
Therefore
, some individuals
over trying
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 to join some activities or drink
a
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coffee alone.
It’s depend
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 on their desire. But some studies as
example
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 for those people who prefer to stay alone, that were finding that those
group
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groups
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 of people are more able to acquire
a psychological issues
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psychological issues
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. In conclusion, I believe that it is better to have
a
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close
friends
 who
are sharing
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 our moments, and it can help us to
pass
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 a drawback situation. Because
sometime
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 it is vital to make something or
trying
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 a new experience together,
that
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 will result in
higher
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a higher
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 happiness level.
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