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The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. ф

The bar chart below shows the top ten countries for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. ф
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The bar chart demonstrates the top ten
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countries
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countries'
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 production and consumption of
electricity
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 in 2014.
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, there are ten
countries
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 that use
electricity
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in
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differently. The
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countries
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country
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electricity’s
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electricity
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 lowest one is
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the Korea
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Korea
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Korean
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 Republic and the highest one is China’s.
The
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apply
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China produce
their
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apply
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electricity
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in
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at
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 5,398 billion
kwh
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kWh
. It is more than
United
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the United
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 States’s production. There
are was
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 4,099 billion
kwh
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kWh
.
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 the
electricity
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 increased to 1,057 it is
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Russia’s
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 producing.
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 China
use
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the
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energy in 5,322 their manufacturing was 5,398. It gives that the more
countries
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 usage a lot than what they were given. There are only two
countries
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 that
applicate
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apply
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 their
electricity
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the
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 same way of
producing
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producing it
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. These
is
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are
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 the
Russia
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 and
Korea
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Korean
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Republic
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Republics
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. Their production and consumption
was
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 less than others but usage
are
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is
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 the same and correct.
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Germany
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Germany's
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manufacturing
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manufactures
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in
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582.5
while
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 their products
was
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 526.6 ,
it
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 71%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, electricity with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "gives" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • electricity production
  • electricity consumption
  • disparity
  • significant
  • top ten countries
  • main features
  • compare
  • relevant
  • geographical concentration
  • trends
  • patterns
  • implications
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