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The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. MM Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graphs below give information about computer ownership as a percentage of the population between 2002 and 2010, and by level of education for the years 2002 and 2010. MM Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given bar charts show data about
computer
 ownership as a percentage of the society between 2002 and 2010, and by
matched
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of literacy for the years 2002 and 2010.
Overall
, the rate of citizens who owned
computer
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computers
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uplifted
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increased
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 significantly and
by
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apply
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education level displays
also
 same results
like
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increased dramatically. In 2010 the proportion of
the
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individuals who had a
computer
 greater than in 2002.
Additionally
 when the level of education getting higher
computer
 education raised up as well.
While
 in 2002 the percentage of
computer
 ownership was just below 60% and it increased nearly to 80%. In 2010, individuals without high school diplomas used computers over 40% of the time, nearly three times more than in 2002. High school graduates almost doubled their
computer
 ownership rate within these eight years. College students’
computer
 usage ratio from 60%
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words computer with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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