The charts below show the percentages of men and women aged 60-64 in employment in four countries in 1970 and 2000 Summaries the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The bar graphs depict the data comparison of older
adults
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employees based on gender
accross
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across
four nations in 1970 and 2000.
Overall
, the percentage of male employees in each country was higher than female employees in both years.
However
, men worked significantly more in the 20th century compared to the 21st century,
while
for women, the differences remained nearly constant. In the first picture, Japan not only led the number of workers in 1970 with 84% but
also
maintained
this
lead in 2000 for just over three quarters. Belgium,
on the other hand
, had a massive downward from almost
four fifths
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to nearly a fifth,
besides
the fact that in 1970 it took the second greatest
percent
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after Japan. In the second illustration, Japan
also
took the biggest value in
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the ladies
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ladies
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ratio, accounting for 43% in 1970 and 40% in 2000. Unlike other states, Australia and the USA experienced a marginal increase of 1% and 2%, respectively.
In contrast
, Belgium had the farthest gap with three others, either 8% in the blue chart or 7% in the orange chart.
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