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The two bar charts below show the proportion of 14-to 16-year-old students studying a foreign language in an English speaking country, and the top three foreign languages. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The two bar charts below show the proportion of 14-to 16-year-old students studying a foreign language in an English speaking country, and the top three foreign languages. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts below show the
amount
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number
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 of teenagers learning a foreign
language
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 in a country whose main medium for communication was English, and the 3 most popular
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language
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languages
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 being learned in the years 1984 and 2007.
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, there was a decrease of approximately 20% in
students
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 learning a new
language
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 in 2007 from its original figure of 80% in 1984.
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, French remained the most studied
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 in both years. In 1984, 80% of
students
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 were studying a foreign
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, approximately 50% were girls and 30% were boys. In the same year, French was studied the most with 50% of the population,
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 20% learned German and just about 10% of
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 were learning Spanish. In 2007, only 60% of the population was engaged in the task.
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,
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similarly
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 in 1984, more girls were involved than boys, with 40% of the group comprising girls and the remaining 20% being boys.
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, the ranking of the 3 languages remained the same in 2007 with French having the most
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, German
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and Spanish
last
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.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "moreover".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words language, students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "show" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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