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The maps below show the changes that took place at a science and technology museum between 1996 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps below show the changes that took place at a science and technology museum between 1996 and 2016. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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maps illustrate the changes a science and technology museum experienced in 10 years from 1996 to 2016. In general, it can be clearly seen that the museum expanded in size by building new infrastructure.
Additionally
, many
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features
 were replaced by something new, in order to
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significantly
 modernize it.
For example
, the writing desks, the cafe and the print room were turned into a
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restaurant
, a digital technology room and computers.
Whereas
, the steam engine exhibition did not change.
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 the map, a part of the car park was given to a bicycle park. New structures,
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 a solar wind area,
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 room and a 3D cinema were constructed. The reception stayed in the same place,
however
, it doubled in size. In comparison, the library was reconstructed to the top of the museum.
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, the diesel engine exhibition was reconstructed into
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 electric car exhibition.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "give" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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