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The pie charts below show reasons why people left the UK for other countries and why people stayed in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show reasons why people left the UK for other countries and why people stayed in the UK. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 why some individuals prefer to emigrate from
England
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 to other nations, and why some
people
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tend
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 to stay in the United Kingdom in 2007. A glance at the graph reveals that the most significant
reason
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 for travelling to other countries and staying in the
UK
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 is
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a definite
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 job.
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,
people
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 did not like to emigrate to other countries for formal
study
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 over the period. In 2007, just
undet
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under
 a third of
people
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 (30%) stayed in
England
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 for
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the definite
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 job, (which was the most momentous
reasons
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reason
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 over the period), just ahead of the proportion of
main
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the main
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reason
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 for immigrants which was
formal
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a formal
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study
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 at roughly
a
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quarter (26%) in the
UK
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 in 2007.
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, 29% of
people
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prefered
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preferred
 to emigrate from
England
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 for
definite
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a definite
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 job in the
UK
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, as opposed to the major
reason
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 for travelling for looking for work at 22% in 2007.
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, only a tiny fraction of individuals travelled to other nations for formal
study
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4% in 2007. ( which was the lowest proportion of main reasons for emigrating over the whole year).
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, the percentage of
people
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 who stayed in the
UK
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 because of looking for work was
completely
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nearly
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 twice as
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people
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many people
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 who had no
reason
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 to
study
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 in
England
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 at 12% and 6%, respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words england, people, reason, uk, study with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stay" was used 3 times.
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