The graph below shows the production of three forest industry products in a European country,namely timber,pulp, and paper, from 1980 to 2000

The graph below shows the production of three forest industry products in a European country,namely timber,pulp, and paper, from 1980 to 2000
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yielding
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the yielding
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of three
variety
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varieties
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of forest factory-made goods in a European country- pulp,
timber
and paper- from 1980 to 2000 at
five-year
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the five-year
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interval
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intervals
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.
Overall
,
although
the figure for pulp was
initially
the most popular type of
industrial-item
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, it was overtaken by that for paper towards the end of the survey.
In contrast
,
yielding
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the yielding
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of
timber
remained the least significant throughout the
period
. In the first year, pulp had a construction of about 6
million
tones
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, after which it experienced a sudden drop of 4 before increasing to around 7
million
tones
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tonnes
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in 1985.There were slight
an
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upward trends until 1995 and ending the
period
at approximately 9.5
million
tones
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tonnes
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. The figure for
timber
was
initially
around 5
million
tones
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tonnes
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and rose rapidly to reach roughly 10
million
tones
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tonnes
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in 1985.
In contrast
,
this
was followed by
moderate
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a moderate
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decrease until
productions
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production
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hit around 6
million
tones
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tonnes
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in 1995.
At the end
of the
period
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period,
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the figure for
timber
witnessed an upward trend, with around 7,5
million
tones
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tonnes
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. Paper construction was originally 4
million
tones
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tonnes
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and had experienced
gradual
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a gradual
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increase, with about 9
million
tones
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tonnes
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, by 1995. There was a sudden drop before remaining rapid increase
about
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12
million
tones
over the
period
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in contrast, initially".
Vocabulary: Replace the words timber, period, million, tones with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "drop" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "rapidly" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Timber production
  • Pulp production
  • Paper production
  • Fluctuations
  • Steady growth
  • Technological advances
  • Demand
  • Market demand
  • Sustainable practices
  • Deforestation
  • Production levels
  • Comparisons
  • Trends
  • Policy changes
  • Patterns
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