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The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instrument in 2005, 2010 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the percentage of school children learning to play different musical instrument in 2005, 2010 and 2015. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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This
 bar chart ,
provide
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provides
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 key information about, school children who play differe2 ,
Overall
.
who
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those who
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learnin
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learnt
a
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the
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piano
 and
gutita
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guitar
get
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got
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 a high
percentage
 in all
years
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the years
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,on
other
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the other
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 hand
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the
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violin
 and drums
was
Verb problem
had
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 the lowest level in all
year
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years
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.
According to
 what
showed
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is shown
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 in a bar chart. In 2015 , the
percentage
to
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of
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who learning
gutitar
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guitar
 and
piano
 was so close to each other by 40% .And who
learnin
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learn
 drums and
violin
 the lowest around 10%. In term. If we look
to
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at
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2010
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the 2010
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 and 2005 data we will note that the level
decraese
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decreased
.
For example
 ,
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the gutitar
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gutitar
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guitar
 and
piano
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the piano
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percentage
was
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were
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aound
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around
 20% and in 2005 10% . But for drums and
violin
 level
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there
thir
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there
 is not a lot of
chanegg
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changes
change
changing
 For comparisons
btween
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between
 the three years . in 2015
gutitar
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guitar
is
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was
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higer
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higher
 and
violin
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the violin
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is
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was
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 the lowest . About 2010 the highest one is
piano
. In 2005 all
percentage
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percentages
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are
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were
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 close to each other .
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words piano, percentage, violin with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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