The three pie charts illustrate how many hours in a British university library are spent by undergraduates and postgraduates compared to other students.

The three pie charts illustrate how many hours  in a British university library  are spent by undergraduates and postgraduates compared to other students.
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The three pie charts
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the
proportion
of time undergraduates and postgraduate
students
spend in the
library
in comparison to other
students
.
Overall
, the most time spent by postgraduate
students
is the highest among other groups.
While
the
proportion
of undergraduate and all
students
remains almost the same with only
difference
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a difference
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of
few
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a few
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hours
. The
percentage
of the
students
who spend 1-7
hours
in the
library
is highest for undergraduate
students
which is
upto
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up to
63%. The other
students
category
also
spend
almpst
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almost
the same
hours
in the
library
, with
the
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percentage
of 50%.
While
the
proportion
of postgraduate
students
who spend
upto
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up to
07
hours
is only 17%. The postgraduates spend more than 15
hours
in
rhe
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the
library
with
the
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proportion
of 51%. In comparison to
others
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other
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groups, their
proportion
remains between 9%( undergraduates) to 15%( all
students
group). The
percentage
of all
students
and postgraduate
students
, who spend 8-14
hours
in the
library
is almost
same
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, which is around 35%.
While
the
percentage
of undergraduate
students
in
this
category is 28%.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trends
  • Significant figures
  • Distribution
  • Comparison
  • Study habits
  • Preferences
  • Distance learners
  • Continuing education
  • Course requirements
  • Research needs
  • Resource allocation
  • Implications
  • Undergraduates
  • Postgraduates
  • Analyzing
  • Highlighting
  • Examining
  • Reviewing
  • Drawing comparisons
  • Summarizing
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