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The given table provides information and predictions about the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three different countries.

The given table provides information and predictions about the change in percentage of the population aged 65 and above in three different countries.
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The given table provides information and predictions about the change in
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of the population aged 65 and above in three different countries.
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, it is clear from the table that the
percentage
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 of the 65 aged population and above has increased in three different countries in three different years. Germany has the highest
percentage
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 of old aged
people
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. In Germany, in 1988, the
percentage
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 of 65 aged and above
people
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were
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 20.42, and it increased to 25.32 in the year 2000. It is expected to be increased to 30.42 in 2030 in Germany. In the year 1988, in Canada, there were 16.32 % of
people
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 aged 65 and above, and in 2000, there were 20.62%
65
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of 65
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aged
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and above
people
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. In the year 2030, the
percentage
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 of 65 aged
people
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 and above will be 26.35. In the UK, in 1988, the
percentage
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 of old
people
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 aged 65 or above was 14.23% and it experienced a slight increase in 2000 which was 14.89%. In 2030, it will be increased up to 20.35%
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "give" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage change
  • population
  • aged 65 and above
  • information
  • table
  • data
  • trends
  • patterns
  • comparison
  • predicted
  • future
  • findings
  • comment
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