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The chart below shows the literacy rates of three different contries between 1930 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.

The chart below shows the literacy rates of three different contries between 1930 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevent.
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The bar chart illustrates changes in the number of
cars
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 per household in a particular European nation from 1971 to 2001.
It is clear that
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car
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 ownership in
this
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 country rose over the period shown.
While
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 the percentage of
families
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 with one, and two or more
cars
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 increased, the figure for households without a
car
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 decreased. In 1971, nearly half of the residents in
this
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 country did not possess a
car
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,
while
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 about 30% of
families
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 owned 1
car
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, and around 18% of
families
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 owned 2 or more
cars
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. Ten years later, the figures for those with no
car
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 or 1
car
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 dropped to just over 40% and 30% respectively. Meanwhile,
families
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 with 2 or more
cars
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 increased to just under 30%. 1991 saw a dramatic rise in 1
car
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 ownership, peaking at almost 50%,
while
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 the percentage of
families
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 with no
car
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, or 2 or more
cars
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, both decreased. In 2001, the percentage of
families
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 with no
car
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, or 2 or more
cars
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, was about equal, at just under 30%,
while
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 about 44% of households owned 1
car
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.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words cars, car, families with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "just under" was used 2 times.
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