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The graph below compares the percentage of unemployed workers in the European union with the percentage in three categories, professional,manual and self employed in the year 1990to 1999

The graph below compares the percentage of unemployed workers in the European union with the percentage in three categories, professional,manual and self employed in the year 1990to 1999
The graph shows the percentage of unemployed
workers
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 in the European Union (EU) from 1990 to 1999, comparing all
workers
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 with professional, manual, and self-employed
workers
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.
Overall
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, the
unemployment
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 rate for all
workers
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 increased significantly, starting at 6% in 1990 and doubling to 12% by 1995 before stabilizing. Manual
workers
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 consistently had the highest
unemployment
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 rate among the categories, beginning at 8%, peaking at 14% in 1995, and
then
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 declining slightly to 10% by 1999. Professional
workers
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 experienced much lower
unemployment
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 levels, fluctuating between 2% and 4% throughout the period. Their
unemployment
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 rates remained relatively stable compared to manual
workers
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. Meanwhile, self-employed
workers
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 consistently had the lowest
unemployment
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 rate, staying under 2% for the entire period, with negligible changes. In summary, manual
workers
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 faced the highest
unemployment
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,
while
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 self-employed
workers
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 were
least
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 affected.
Unemployment
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 among all
workers
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 rose significantly before stabilizing after 1995.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words workers, unemployment with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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