You have just rented an unfurnished flat and a friend has told you that the opportunity shop is the shopping centre has cheap secondhand furniture. Write to the shop, owner, describing what you need and asking whether they have this items and what they cost.

Dear Manager, I am writing to ask
some
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for some
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information about used
furniturs
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furniture
. I am an international sdutent. I rented
new
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home near the University. I have
plan
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to buy
home
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a home
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uses
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using
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furnitures
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furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
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that are
rodeting
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rotating
chaire
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chair
chairs
, smart table and cloth hunger.
Moreover
,
Last
day morning I saw one of your
advertisement
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from
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on
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facebook
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about
homeholds
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households
home holds
.My friend
also
told me most people
bouth
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bought
many things. I think you are shop is very
suitabe
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suitable
for me because your selling price will be
usful
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useful
for me.
Lastly
, I have to know
about do
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you have my collection in your store. If you have when I buy
this
and If you have not when I will buy
this items
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this item
these items
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.
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I expect your
valuvable
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valuable
commants
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comments
commands
soon.
Your
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Faithfully Raam
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coherence cohesion
To improve the logical structure, consider organizing your paragraphs more clearly. Group similar ideas together and ensure each paragraph has a clear topic sentence.
task achievement
Try to address all the points of the task more clearly. Make sure you specify exactly what you're seeking in terms of number or style of furniture.
coherence cohesion
The greeting and closing are respectful and appropriate for a formal letter.
task achievement
You successfully convey the main purpose of your letter, which is to inquire about available secondhand furniture.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • unfurnished flat
  • secondhand furniture
  • opportunity shop
  • availability
  • items
  • cost
  • budget
  • condition
  • warranty
  • return policy
  • sale
  • discount
  • contact details
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