the charts below show the changes in ownership of electical appliances and amount of time spend doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. summarise the informartion by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The first line graph illustrates the proportion of households who have used three electric devices (washing machine, refrigerator and vacuum cleaner) from 1920 to 2019,
while
the other line graph demonstrates the average number of hours that each household had
spent on doing their relevant duties in their house in a typical week by 2019.
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Overall
, it can be clearly seen that the percentage of using these devices had increased by 2019, while
the amount of time spent on doing housework in households decreased during this
period. It also
can be apparently witnessed that refrigerators when they had almost no clients in 1920 became more popular in 2019.
According to
the first graph, the proportions of both refrigerators and vacuum cleaners, which were about 3 and 30 in 1920 in order, rose dramatically until 1960 to approximately %90 and %70 respectively, then
followed this
trend with less power to almost %100 for both of them. In addition
, the percentage of using washing machines which was %40 in 1920 had increased to more than %73 by 2019, however
, it faced a little
drop between 1960 and 1980.
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On the other hand
, the number of hours per week that households spent their routines in their home had dropped by 1960 from about %50 (the maximum in 1920) to %20. Moreover
, this
decline had continued steadily by 2019 when was the less just above %10.Submitted by mortezashamsa on
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