The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities form 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph provides information about the proportion of the total population in
the
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some Asian nations
such
as
Philippines
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the Philippines
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,
Malaysia
,
Thailand
,
Indonesia
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and Indonesia
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living in cities from 1970 to 2020 and
also
foresees for 2030 and 2040
Overall
,
a
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glance at
graph
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,
it
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is clear, despite all countries in
the
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some
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years
had
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being
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a downward trend at
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the passange
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passange
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passage
of time
but
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, they
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though, is expected that these trends would be continued more sharply by 2040. In 1970,
Philippines
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the Philippines
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had the most city residents among the countries with 32% and
this
had a short difference in comparison to
Malaysia
with 30%,
then
followed by
Thailand
with just
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less than 20% and
Indonesia
with around 15%.
Although
, the proportion of
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city residents of
Malaysia
and
Indonesia
increased significantly by 2020,
however
,
Thailand
's public
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remained at just less than 30,
Malaysia
after reaching
at
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50%
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in 1990
, dropped gradually by 40% in
this
period.
Furthermore
, they are predicted from 2030 to 2040, all countries will face a remarkable increase in growth
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population living in cities. It seems,
Malaysia
going to hit 80%,
Indonesia
will be in second place with 60%
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followed by
Philippines
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the Philippines
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and
Thailand
with around 55% and 45% respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words malaysia, thailand, indonesia with synonyms.
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