In many cities problems related to overpopulation are becoming more common. Some governments are now encouraging businesses and individuals to move rural areas. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of this.
In a wide range of heavily populated locations, which are getting more, few governments are clapping
people
and businesses to live in Use synonyms
villages
, which can be beneficial, but not in some specific situations. Some jobs can not be useful in Use synonyms
villages
, Use synonyms
while
Linking Words
people
can live more relaxed and comfortable there.
Retirees can experience a peaceful Use synonyms
life
in Use synonyms
villages
in comparison to cities. Today Use synonyms
by
expansion overpopulation urban Change preposition
of
life
is getting towards being more busy and Use synonyms
more
pollution which is annoying for elderly Correct pronoun usage
there more
people
living in a village can solve Use synonyms
this
problem so that they get calm and comfortable in their daily Linking Words
life
. Use synonyms
For example
, my parents received their salary from insurance in they Linking Words
are
retired, so they decided to go and live in their village house to be more relaxed and have a more sheltered Wrong verb form
were
life
which is not acceptable in cities.
Use synonyms
However
, Linking Words
people
who are professionals in some jobs can not immigrate to Use synonyms
villages
because of their jobs. Use synonyms
People
who have a good work history in some specific job can not live in Use synonyms
villages
because Use synonyms
of
their expertise not going to be useful in Change preposition
apply
villages
. Use synonyms
For example
one of my friends is a metro designer and she has to work for big companies and design new trains for Linking Words
this
company. Linking Words
It is clear that
if she immigrates to a village can not work any more.
In conclusion, Linking Words
for
some Change preposition
apply
people
who do not have a specific job can easily live in Use synonyms
villages
but some other Use synonyms
people
have to live there because of expanding their job and helping society.Use synonyms
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In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite