The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart illustrates data about how
families
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spent their weekly earnings in
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1968
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to 2018. In
generall
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general
, what stands out from the graph is that
,
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families
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in 1968 were spending their income mostly on food and housing.
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However
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in 2018, leisure had the most part in the
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families
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weekly spend. Looking at the details, as regards to number for 1968, with about 35
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percent
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, food is the first thing that people
had
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spent income on
that
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.
Next,
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housing and clothing with 10
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percent
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were the next
things
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that
families
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had spent their weekly earnings on
that
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.
However
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, Fuel and power with just over 5
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had the lowest percentage among other
things
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in 1968.
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,
families
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in 2018 spent most of their income on leisure with over 20
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percent
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.
Following
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this
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, housing and food with nearly 20
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percent
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and over 15
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percent
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recpectively
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respectively
were the next
things
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that
families
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spent most of their weekly incomes on that in 2018
while
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personal goods and fuel with below 5
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percent
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were the
things
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that
families
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in 2018 did not spend much money on that.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words families, percent, things with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • compare
  • spending patterns
  • allocated
  • weekly income
  • significant changes
  • essential items
  • food
  • housing
  • clothing
  • leisure
  • communication
  • increase
  • decrease
  • twofold rise
  • substantial increase
  • quadrupling
  • declined
  • food and drink
  • slight increase
  • prioritizing
  • necessities
  • transitioned
  • portio
  • non-essential items
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