The chart below gives information about how families in one country spent their weekly income in 1968 and in 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates data about how
families
spent their weekly earnings in Use synonyms
year
1968 Change the article
the year
compare
to 2018.
In Wrong verb form
compared
generall
, what stands out from the graph is thatCorrect your spelling
general
,
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apply
families
in 1968 were spending their income mostly on food and housing. Use synonyms
Linking Words
However
in 2018, leisure had the most part in the Add a comma
However,
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families
weekly spend.
Looking at the details, as regards to number for 1968, with about 35 Change noun form
family's
families'
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percent
, food is the first thing that people Change the spelling
per cent
had
spent income onUnnecessary verb
apply
that
. Correct pronoun usage
apply
Next,
housing and clothing with 10 Linking Words
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percent
were the next Change the spelling
per cent
things
that Use synonyms
families
had spent their weekly earnings onUse synonyms
that
. Correct pronoun usage
apply
However
, Fuel and power with just over 5 Linking Words
percent
had the lowest percentage among other Use synonyms
things
in 1968.
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By contrast
, Linking Words
families
in 2018 spent most of their income on leisure with over 20 Use synonyms
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percent
. Change the spelling
per cent
Following
Linking Words
this
, housing and food with nearly 20 Linking Words
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percent
and over 15 Change the spelling
per cent
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percent
Change the spelling
per cent
recpectively
were the next Correct your spelling
respectively
things
that Use synonyms
families
spent most of their weekly incomes on that in 2018 Use synonyms
while
personal goods and fuel with below 5 Linking Words
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percent
were the Change the spelling
per cent
things
that Use synonyms
families
in 2018 did not spend much money on that.Use synonyms
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Vocabulary: Replace the words families, percent, things with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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