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Many people believe that cooking is an essential life skill and should be taught to boys and girls in schools. Others disagree and believe it is a waste of school time. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #life #skill #boys #girls #schools #waste #school #time
Some
people
 think that cooking is a vital tool,
therefore
 it has to be part of the subjects in the
school
 system.
On the other hand
, other
people
disagre
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disagree
 with the previous view because they think that cooking doesn’t give any useful knowledge to the
youths
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. Regarding the first view, there are several reasons why
people
 think that cooking is a vital skill for daily life and it has to be taught at
school
. First
at
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 all, cooking can help to improve
selfcare
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self-care
self care
.
In other words
, when young
people
 learn to
cook
 in the education system, they are able to be more independent and look after themselves without asking
to
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their parents for help. To give an example, if a guy who has been taught at
school
 how to
cook
, goes to study abroad, he can look after himself and be as independent as possible by cooking all the meals he needs in order to survive.
Secondly
, teaching how to
cook
 helps to improve
the
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creativity.
For instance
, if a girl doesn’t have enough ingredients for cooking she has to find a quick fix to make her plate and
this
 skill can be
also
 extended to other tasks
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 life. Contrary to the previous view, there are some
people
 who think that cooking has to be
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banned
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 from
school
, because it’s not
an
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 useful skill to learn. They think that there are subjects which are more important than cooking
such
 as
maths
.
Maths
 for counting and
be
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 able to manage the economy. To give an example, cooking is not as useful as
maths
 because when a guy goes to
supermarket
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 he has to keep in
my
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mind how much money he has inside his pocket and
also
 he has to know what he is able to buy with that money.
Thus
, learning
maths
 is more important than cooking
as well as
 other subjects,
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 of that the
school
 system shouldn’t teach it. In my opinion, I firmly agree with the
people
 who think that cooking should be taught at
school
,
due to
 the fact that it improves
indipendency
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independence
independency
, creativity,
as well as
 the ability to solve problems and
also
 it helps to release stress. Research has proven that cooking may help
people
 to relax by using their hands to
cook
, similar to a baby who likes to play with the sand.
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task achievement
Ensure each paragraph clearly relates to the main topic and each point is fully developed and relevant.
coherence cohesion
Structure your essay into clear paragraphs: introduction, body, and conclusion, and ensure the argument flows logically.
task achievement
Good attempt at discussing both sides of the argument.
coherence cohesion
The essay provides personal opinion with reasoning in the conclusion.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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