The line graph shows the information for internet users as percentage of population in three countries from 1999 and 2009.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows the information for internet users as percentage of population in three countries from 1999 and 2009.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph gives information about the variation in the
percentage
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of
Internet
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users
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in 3 countries from 1999 to 2009.
Overall
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, the rate in all countries in
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line graph increased through 20 years. It
obviously
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that
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Canada
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users
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rocketed over the period of time In 1990, the
percentage
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of people who used the
internet
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in the
USA
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reached the highest
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more than 20%, followed by
Canada
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and Mexico
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10% and 5%. 2 years later, American
users
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still remained in their position
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40%. The
percentage
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of
users
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in
Canada
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and Mexico increased slightly to 28% and 10%. In 2003, it witnessed the first time
Internet
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users
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as
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percentage
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a percentage
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of
population
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the population
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in
Canada
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led in the graph with 60%
while
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the
USA
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users
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reached only 50%. The rate of Mexican
users
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rose by 10%. In 2005, the
percentage
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of
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Canada
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Canadian
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and
USA
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users
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were
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the same
with
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70%. In 2007, it
experienced
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the second time the
percentage
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of Canadian
users
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overcame American
users
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with
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80% compared to 75% by the
USA
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.
At the end
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of the period, the figure for
Canada
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rose significantly to 100%, making it the leading source of
Internet
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users
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while
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the rate of
Internet
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users
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in the
USA
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grew to 80%. In Mexico, the
percentage
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of
Internet
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users
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climbed to 35% in 2009
although
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it still remained the lowest level in
this
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report.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, internet, users, canada, usa with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 7 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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