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Since science and technology are becoming more and more important in modern society, schools should spend more time on teaching these subjects rather on arts and humanities. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#science #technology #society #schools #time #subjects #arts #humanities
Subjects
such
 as arts and humanities are important to build
society
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 that has more modern minds.
Although
 Some of the people agree, there are a lot of the
society
 who disagree with
this
 idea. At
first,
there are a few things that make the
society
thinks
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 it is a good thing for
there
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their
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 families and children.
first,
the
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technology
which
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makes everyone with different
mind
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minds
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, and
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that's
thats
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that
 why they agree with
this
 idea.
Secondly
, the importance of
this
 science which become more by
the
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time, and arts is one of these
science
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. There are a lot of reasons why people think it is a
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 idea,
such
 as the wasting of time.
However
, I disagree with them because I see how important these subjects are for
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society
 and I think it is a leap to the
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success
.
Finally
, I would like to say that everyone has a
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reason
 that
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 him rather agree or disagree, and it is normal that every person has his own side of thinking, and everyone wants the best for his
society
, and things
such
 as schools will help to
devolep
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develop
 a better
society
 and it is an important part.
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