The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The two pictures provide information about the layouts of a
musem
in the years 1998 and 2008.
Correct your spelling
museum
It is clear that
the entrance stayed at the same location as 10 years ago, Linking Words
as well as
the garden. Linking Words
However
, they replaced the permanent exhibition room on the left side with different facilities, expanding the size of the temporary one.
There were three exhibition rooms in the first picture, two together and one Linking Words
seperately
, Correct your spelling
separately
whereas
we can see that they were all put together in the new layout a decade later. Linking Words
Also
, Linking Words
in contrast
to the past, the museum was equipped with a restaurant Linking Words
along with
Linking Words
the
cafe. Correct article usage
a
Also
, Linking Words
cafe
sitting area and fountains were installed in the garden which had been situated in the middle.
Looking at the new map, it shows that the right part of the place consisted of only permanent Correct article usage
a cafe
exihibitions
. Correct your spelling
exhibitions
exhibition
Additionally
, they moved the gift shop Linking Words
to
between the ticket office and where people keep bags and coats. Change preposition
apply
Furthermore
, the toilet was moved to the top side of the floor.Linking Words
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