The map below shows the plan of a museum in 1998 and after some changes were made in it in 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The two pictures provide information about the layouts of a
musem
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museum
in the years 1998 and 2008.
It is clear that
the entrance stayed at the same location as 10 years ago,
as well as
the garden.
However
, they replaced the permanent exhibition room on the left side with different facilities, expanding the size of the temporary one. There were three exhibition rooms in the first picture, two together and one
seperately
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separately
,
whereas
we can see that they were all put together in the new layout a decade later.
Also
,
in contrast
to the past, the museum was equipped with a restaurant
along with
the
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a
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cafe.
Also
,
cafe
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a cafe
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sitting area and fountains were installed in the garden which had been situated in the middle. Looking at the new map, it shows that the right part of the place consisted of only permanent
exihibitions
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exhibitions
exhibition
.
Additionally
, they moved the gift shop
to
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apply
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between the ticket office and where people keep bags and coats.
Furthermore
, the toilet was moved to the top side of the floor.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • rectangular shape
  • central garden area
  • symmetrically arranged
  • expanded galleries
  • visitor flow management
  • temporary exhibition space
  • permanent gallery
  • visitor facilities
  • customer service focus
  • dedicated children's area
  • expanded restroom facilities
  • museum gardens
  • unoccupied outdoor space
  • shift towards long-term exhibits
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