The diagram details the process of making smoked fish. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram illustrates data about smoked fish's production.
Overall
,
it is clear that
the process has 13 steps,from fishing fish to deliver to the stores. The first three steps include information about fishing. If at the outset, they are hunted with nets, the next two steps are distributed by boat to the port.
Furthermore
, the next five stages are cleaning the product and cooking the meat. In the fourth step, they are frozen in the containers and after that, they are thawed to the fresh water.
Moreover
,
after
this
stage,they cut from their heads and
then
washed in saltwater with yellow colours.
Nonetheless
, the
last
five of them show preparing for the delivery and giving to the shops. After smoking under the fire, they are packaged and frozen at 0 Celsius again in the cold stores. After all of them, smoked meat is put in the minivans and transported to the ocean meat markets.
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