It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?

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Undeniably, raising

children

is more important than giving birth to them. Rules should be learned completely to have

right

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behavior

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and

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wrong ones by teachers and parents without any

punishment

. In my opinion, I disagree that

punishment

is a useful idea for teaching them. A good reason to abolish

doing

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punishment

it gives

children

, whether they are

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in preschools

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preschools

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preschoolers

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adolescence

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, destructive

behavior

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behaviour

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. At present, depressed adults

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apply

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in our society

who

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are disappoint

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without

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self- confidence

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, so it originates

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their inner child. In

the

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other

worlds

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punishment

can be

main

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reason

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mental problems in the future. It will have the

right

effects or harm the mental help of modern society.

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it is important learning them the difference between

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correct way without penalty is very important,

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showing the best way to them is enough without considering their

behavior

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, because they should experience themselves if they want to be useful for society.

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, it is so markable to learn

children

that have

right

behavior

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but without

punishment

, not only does it drift apart family member but

also

growing unhealthy

children

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can,

therefore

ruins

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relationship

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between

children

and their parents or it can good reason to drop out of school.

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, if parents and

teacher

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teachers

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use good

penalty

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penalties

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for wrong

behavior

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behaviour

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children

will be polite and obliging. In conclusion,

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children

on a path of

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nurture without

punishment

is a must for any family that values mental health

problem

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and having

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a close

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close knit

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family.

Children

without trouble

childhood

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in childhood

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can know themselves inside out.

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Topic Vocabulary:

punishment
positive reinforcement
consequences
time-outs
removal of privileges
open communication
clear expectations
consistency
fairness
disciplinary action
proportionate
moral values
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