It is important for children to learn the difference between right and wrong at an early age. Punishment is necessary to help them learn this distinction. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion. What sort of punishment should parents and teachers be allowed to use to teach good behaviour to children?
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children
is more important than giving birth to them. Rules should be learned completely to have right
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the right
behavior
and Change the spelling
behaviour
avoiding
wrong ones by teachers and parents without any Wrong verb form
avoid
punishment
. In my opinion, I disagree that punishment
is a useful idea for teaching them.
A good reason to abolish doing
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apply
punishment
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in preschools
preschools
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preschoolers
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. At present, depressed adults Change the spelling
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who
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are disappoint
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are disappointed
without
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and without
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self-confidence
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their inner child. In Change preposition
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punishment
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the main
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mental problems in the future. It will have the Change preposition
for
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effects or harm the mental help of modern society. Although
it is important learning them the difference between right
and wrong, using a
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for instance
showing the best way to them is enough without considering their behavior
, because they should experience themselves if they want to be useful for society.
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behaviour
Finally
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punishment
, not only does it drift apart family member but also
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relationship
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the relationship
children
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teachers
penalty
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penalties
behavior
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behaviour
children
will be polite and obliging.
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children
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nurture without punishment
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