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The line graphs show wheat exports in Australia, Canada and European Community Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graphs show wheat exports in Australia, Canada and European Community Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given line graph illustrates the number of wheat exports in three
differnet
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different
 countries between 1985 and 1990.
Overall
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,it is clearly seen that the number of wheat exports in
European
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the European
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 Community experienced an upward
trends
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trend
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,
while
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 there
are
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is
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 a gradual downward in the
figure
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 for Australia and Canada. In detail,the number of wheat exports in
European
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the European
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 Community started at
17million
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17 million
tonnes
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, and decreased slightly to 15
million
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tonnes
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 in 1987.
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 the
figure
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maintain
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 the same level from 1987 to 1988.After that, the proportion increased steadily to 21
million
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tonnes
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 in the final year. Turning to the
figure
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 for Australia started at 15
million
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tonnes
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, and
go
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went
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 up merely to 16 in 1986.
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figure
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 dropped significantly to 13
million
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tonnes
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 over the next 3 years, and
stay
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stayed
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 constant in 1990.In
case
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the case
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 of Canada,the proportion started at 19
million
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tonnes
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, and
fall
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fell
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 gradually to 17
million
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tonnes
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.Afterwards, the
figure
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rise
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rose
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 considerably to 25
million
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tonnes
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 between 1986 and 1988, and slumped steeply to 14
million
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tonnes
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.
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 the proportion climbed dramatically to 18
million
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tonnes
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 in 1990.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words figure, tonnes, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • exports
  • trends
  • fluctuations
  • decline
  • rise
  • surpass
  • modest growth
  • significant
  • stability
  • comparisons
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