The graph compares employment rates in three sectors of the economy in the UK, 2000-2010 Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparions where relevant.

The line graph provides information about the rate of employment in three sectors in the United Kingdom between 2000 to 2010.
It is clear that
the self-employed and public
sector
increased
during
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over
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10 years, but the private
sector
of the UK economy decreased at the same time
although
it had the most amount of rates rather
to
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than
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the two other sectors. The amount of self-employed jumped around 12% during 10 years except from 2002 to mid-2003 witch it slightly declined.
Moreover
, public
sector
rates rose as same as the self-employed section but went down by around one year from 2005 to 2006. In 2000, the private
sector
had the
most
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proportion compared with other sections but dramatically dropped around 28 per cent and became the lowest rate in the UK economy in 2010.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • employment rates
  • economy
  • sectors
  • agriculture
  • manufacturing
  • services
  • trends
  • increases
  • decreases
  • comparison
  • highest
  • lowest
  • economic policies
  • technological advancements
  • global market demands
  • patterns
  • decade
  • significant changes
  • abrupt changes
  • stability
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