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Global warming is one of the biggest threats humans facing in the twenty first century and sea levels continue towards an alarming rate. Give solution for this problem.

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Global warming is one of the biggest threats to mankind, wildlife, and the ecosystem world
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 issue stems from a number of causes, and several solutions will be proposed in
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 essay. There are several reasons why the temperature on the earth has become more intense these days. The main cause is
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 human activities
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 as building factories, driving more cars and increasing
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 of
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. Since these activities make a significant contribution to realizing carbon footprint.
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, human burns fossil
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 to create energy, leading to the rise of
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 gasses. Another factor is related to the act of cutting down trees and damaging the natural
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 of wildlife. The atmospheric content of
co2
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CO2
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 is related to deforestation and trees
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 because trees are the source of reducing carbon emissions. It is observed that
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control
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global warming has been always a difficult act for both governments and
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individual
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individuals
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, citizens can try to be greener for rising carbon footprint from the environment.
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 instance, they can take public transport rather than driving private cars. On the other side, governments have crucial role
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climate
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against climate
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changes
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 in recent years.
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, they can register laws to limit emissions from factories and invest in renewable energy from natural sources
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 global warming has
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serious
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 danger to the world. But if people and governments follow
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 solutions which
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 given above, we will control
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 issue in the future.

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coherence cohesion
In order to improve clarity, focus on structuring your points in a more coherent way, such as using more connecting words, and ensuring each paragraph supports your main idea clearly.
task achievement
Provide more specific examples to support your arguments. For instance, when discussing renewable energy, mention specific projects or initiatives already in place.
task achievement
The essay encompasses both individual and governmental actions, offering a balanced view on solutions.
coherence cohesion
A clear introduction and conclusion frame the essay nicely, providing a solid structure.

Answer the 'Problem and Solution' topic

Problem-and-solution essays fall naturally into two parts, the first describing and exploring the problem, the second setting out the solution or solutions.

You essay structure should look something like this:

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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