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The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows the production of milk annually in four countries in 1990, 2000 and 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the man features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart provides information about the production of a dairy product per
year
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 in four different places in the years 1990, 2000 and 2010.
It is clear that
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Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 produced the largest amount of milk for 20 decades, followed by Australia,
Tanzania
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and Tanzania
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.
However
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, Guatemala showed the lowest numbers during the whole timeframe across those countries. We can see that, compared to the first
year
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, Australia is the only country which experienced a decline in the
last
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year
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,
whereas
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 the figures for
other
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the other
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 three regions increased in 2010. Even though
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 makes over 11,000,000 at least per
year
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, it can be seen that there
is
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are
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 no rapid increases or decreases between the years.
Furthermore
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, the amount of produced product in Guatemala was a mere 26,000 in 1990.
However
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, that of 2020 was more than twice as high as 10 years ago, comprising 55,000.
Also
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, It kept rising until the end of the period. Tanzania steadily rose by the end of the
year
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 from 87,000 to 1,55,000.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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