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Writing Samples
Band 1

Overall, in two sessions, the percentage of students increased in all universities. For Coventry University and Sheffield University, the percentage increased the most.

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, in two sessions, the percentage of
students
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 increased in all universities. For Coventry University and Sheffield University, the percentage increased the most. In terms of Coventry University, in
2020
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the 2020
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/2021 session, the number of
students
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 increased around 121.3 % . There were 2390
students
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 in
2020
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the 2020
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/2021 session, and in 2021/2022, there were 5290
students
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 from India.

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introduction conclusion present
Consider adding a clear introduction that outlines the scope of your discussion. This will help guide the reader through your essay.
complete response
Try providing a more detailed analysis of the percentages mentioned to enhance understanding. Consider contextualizing these increases in relation to external factors or reasons.
relevant specific examples
The essay uses relevant specific examples, such as precise figures of percentage increase and student numbers, which enhances credibility.
logical structure
The essay has a logical structure that compares universities effectively, focusing on Coventry and Sheffield Universities.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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