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The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the amount of money spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria between 1995 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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 line graph presents
the
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apply
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information on how much
money
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 was spent on books in Germany, France, Italy and Austria from 1995 to 2005.
Overall
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, the
amount
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 of
money
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 spent on books in Austria has experienced a fluctuation and has remained the highest one during
this
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 period. Despite the fact that German citizens spent the lowest
amount
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 of
money
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, it witnessed a dramatic increase and even
overtake
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 the
amount
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 of
money
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 spent by Italian citizens. Looking at the details, after the small fluctuation, Italians spent about 60
million
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dollars
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 in 2005. Before increasing sharply in
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last
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the last
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 2 years, Germans spent the same
amount
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 of
money
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 between 1999 and 2001, 40
million
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dollars
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. With respect to
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the French
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, the
amount
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 of
money
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 they spent has risen gradually by 20
million
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dollars
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 over a decade. Both French and Italian citizens spent approximately the same
amount
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 of
money
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 in 1997, roughly 58
millions
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million
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. After experiencing
noticeable
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a noticeable
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 increase to 90
millions
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million
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 in 1999, the
amount
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 of
money
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 Austrians
have
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spent on books decreased slowly by about 8
million
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dollars
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,
however
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, they peaked at 95
millions
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million
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words money, amount, million, dollars with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 7 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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