The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five autralia cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The provided bar graph illustrates the information about
percentage
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the percentage
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of consumers who bought
coffee
and
tea
in five Australian cities.
Overall
, the highest number of
people
have
been
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bought
coffee
or
tea
in
last
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the last
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4 weeks in Melbourne and Hobart
while
least
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the least
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number of
item
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items
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that the customers
ask
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asked
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is fresh
coffee
in both Brisbane and
Adelaide
. When considering
People
who live in Melbourne and Hobart their first
choise
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choice
is to visit
cafe
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the cafe
a cafe
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for
tea
or
coffee
which is just below 65%
while
,
people
in Brisbane it is just 55%.
In contrast
, nearly 50%
Adelaide
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of Adelaide
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residents went for
coffee
or
tea
. Both Brisbane and
Adelaide
people
have less
preferance
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preference
for fresh
coffee
which
are
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neary
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nearly
35% respectively. In
comparition
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comparison
of
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to
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instant
coffee
and fresh
coffee
,
people
of
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from
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all five cities
brought
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bought
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more instant
coffe
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coffee
than fresh
coffee
.
However
,
people
who live in Sydney like both instant
coffee
and fresh
coffee
in relatively same numbers.
In addition
,
Adelaide
people
prefer more
intant
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instant
intent
coffee
than
coffee
or
tea
.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, people, adelaide with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.

You are not ready for IELTS Speaking, if you

  • Can’t speak smoothly without pauses.
  • Use simple words and lack vocabulary.
  • Feel nervous and anxious when speaking.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • consumption
  • beverage
  • preference
  • compare
  • quantities
  • supermarkets
  • cafes
  • consume
  • patterns
  • notable
  • significant
  • trends
  • demographic
  • gender
  • habit
  • occasionally
  • frequently
  • cultural influence
  • workdays
  • weekends
  • paraphrase
  • analyze
  • summarize
  • draw conclusions
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