The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five autralia cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the results of a survey about people's coffee and tea buying and drinking habits in five autralia cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The provided bar graph illustrates the information about
percentage
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the percentage
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of consumers who bought
coffee
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and
tea
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in five Australian cities.
Overall
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, the highest number of
people
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have
been
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bought
coffee
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or
tea
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in
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last
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the last
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4 weeks in Melbourne and Hobart
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least
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the least
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number of
item
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items
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that the customers
ask
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asked
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is fresh
coffee
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in both Brisbane and
Adelaide
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. When considering
People
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who live in Melbourne and Hobart their first
choise
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choice
is to visit
cafe
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the cafe
a cafe
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for
tea
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or
coffee
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which is just below 65%
while
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,
people
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in Brisbane it is just 55%.
In contrast
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, nearly 50%
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Adelaide
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of Adelaide
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residents went for
coffee
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or
tea
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. Both Brisbane and
Adelaide
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people
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have less
preferance
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preference
for fresh
coffee
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which
are
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neary
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nearly
35% respectively. In
comparition
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comparison
of
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to
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instant
coffee
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and fresh
coffee
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,
people
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of
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from
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all five cities
brought
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bought
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more instant
coffe
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coffee
than fresh
coffee
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.
However
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,
people
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who live in Sydney like both instant
coffee
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and fresh
coffee
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in relatively same numbers.
In addition
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,
Adelaide
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people
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prefer more
intant
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instant
intent
coffee
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than
coffee
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or
tea
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, tea, people, adelaide with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • survey
  • consumption
  • beverage
  • preference
  • compare
  • quantities
  • supermarkets
  • cafes
  • consume
  • patterns
  • notable
  • significant
  • trends
  • demographic
  • gender
  • habit
  • occasionally
  • frequently
  • cultural influence
  • workdays
  • weekends
  • paraphrase
  • analyze
  • summarize
  • draw conclusions
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