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You recently borrowed an item of clothing from a friend. While you had this item, it was damaged. Write a letter to your friend. in your letter you should: apologise for damaging the item of clothing explain how it became damaged say what you will do to fix the problem Write at least 150 words.

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Dear Vadim, I am writing to inform you that yesterday I accidentally damaged
your
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 shoes that
i
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 borrowed from you. In spite of
beeng
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being
veary
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very
 careful with them, I managed to ruin them because I was not
payng
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paying
atention
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attention
.
Firstly
, I want to apologise for damaging your shoes. So that, I will
asume
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assume
 the
responsability
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responsibility
 for my falt. Let me explain how it happened
,
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while
plaing
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playing
placing
 football I fell on the ground because I
wasant
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wasn't
paing
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paying
 attention to what was happening near me.
Therefore
, I made a cut on the
lest
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left
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 side of your right shoe.
Initially
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 I thot
everithing
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everything
 was
alright
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,
byt
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but
 the next second
i
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I
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stepd
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stepped
step
steps
 on my foot I felt
somthing
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something
umpleasant
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unpleasant
. In order to fix the problem I will buy you a
nex
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new
 pair of sneakers on your own wish. It does not matter how much it will cost, what brand they are or from where they are, the only thing that matters
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 me is to give you a new pair of sneakers. Your friend Andrei.
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Task Achievement
The response is adequate, but try to be more specific about how you plan to replace the shoes (e.g., exact brand or type Vale prefers).
Coherence and Cohesion
Check for spelling and grammatical errors to enhance clarity and coherence.
Absolution of Task
You maintained a friendly and apologetic tone throughout the letter, which is suitable for writing to a friend.
Coherence and Cohesion
The letter includes clear structure with an apology, explanation, and future action.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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