The graph below shows the percentage of GDP government spending on health, education and road & railways from 2000 to 2025 in a particular country.

The line graph provides information about the amount of GDP
government
Correct article usage
the government
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expend
Verb problem
spends
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on
health
, education and
road
& railways between 25 years from 2000 to 2025 in a specific country.
Overall
,the expenditure
of
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on
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education and
road
facilities slightly decrease during 25 years.
while
,
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apply
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health
became more valuable and
government
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the government
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expending
highest
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the highest
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amount of money for
this
zone. In 2000,4% of GDP
alocated
Correct your spelling
allocated
to
health
and
road
& railroad but the cost of
health
dramatically increased to 7.2% .
while
the
road
proportion
remain
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remained
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steadty
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steady
and it
was increase
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was increased
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from 4% in 2000 to 4.5 by 2015 and
then
suddenly
decrease
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decreased
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to 3.9% in 2025. The highest proportion of GDP spending
for
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on
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education in 2000 but it
is
Unnecessary verb
apply
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went down from 5% in 2000 to 4% by 2025.
also
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also,
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it
jomped
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jumped
to 6.9% in 2005 and had more increase close to 7% before suddenly drop.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words health, road with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.

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