You recently borrowed an item of clothing from a friend. While you had this item, it was damaged. Write a letter to your friend. In your letter you should : Apologise for damaging the item of clothing Explain how it became damaged Say what you will do to fix the problem.
Dear Marina,
I write to you to confess and come clean about an unfortunate event.
If you remember, you gave me that knee-length, off-shoulder, pink dress for an important event that was coming up the other day in Munich. I am really sorry and I apologise for the mistake, I hope you can forgive me.
It happened during the event around the
self service
buffet area. I made myself a coffee and I was being extra careful to not stain the piece of clothing, yet because of someone else’s carelessness, Add a hyphen
self-service
unfortunately
I got coffee Add a comma
unfortunately,
spilled
all over it.
If there is any way you want me to repay you, since I am partially at fault for it, please contact me as soon as you can. I can send you the money via card or I can buy you a similar shirt, maybe I’ll take you on a full shopping spree as I pay for anything. I know it was Change the spelling
spilt
tour
favourite, so I’m willing to Correct article usage
a tour
to
anything.
Lots of love
Gabriela CostinCorrect your spelling
do
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Tone
Try to maintain a more consistent tone throughout the letter. Although the tone is generally appropriate, some expressions like 'full shopping spree' may slightly deviate from the heartfelt tone.
Coherence and Cohesion
To improve coherence and cohesion, use linking words or phrases to better connect sentences and paragraphs, such as 'Unfortunately,','However,', and 'Therefore,'.
Task Response
The letter clearly states the purpose with an appropriate apology and explanation.
Coherence and Cohesion
The closing of the letter is warm and fits well with the context of writing to a friend.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure of the letter is logical and adheres well to the standard format for such correspondence.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite