The charts below show the percentage of water used for different six areas of the world. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main fea make comparisons where relevant.

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The pie charts illustrate the proportion of usage of

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water in the six zones including, North

America

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, South

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Europe

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, Africa, Central

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and South East

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. categorized by type of

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such

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as in an industrial,

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agricultural or

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domestic.

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it is clear that

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North

America

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and

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have the highest usage of water in the industries,

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other areas spend more

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agriculture.

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Europe

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devoted the highest application to factories and power stations with 53%

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followed by North

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with 48%,

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, these two areas

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less than 15% to Agricultural lands.

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, water used in

Europe

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is 32% and in North

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is 39%. Meanwhile, Central

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, South East

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and South

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much more of their resources to the rural zone where the majority of people work on the farm with 88%, 84%, 81% and 71% respectively.

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, they provide minimum application in the industries in comparison to two other areas.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words america, europe, asia with synonyms.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 9.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

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